• That Certain Spot in North Carolina

    Memories written by: Nadine

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    North Carolina. Unforgettable. A memorable memory… of my favorite place on Earth.   

     

     This summer I went to my Uncle Buck & Aunt Claudia’s house in North Carolina. There were adventures waiting for me. They live in Hertford. They have a daughter named Diana. She is special needs and is 33 years old. They have 3 dogs Charlie, Patches, and Sam. Charlie is 9, Patches is 16, and Sam was 14 (Sam died in September of 2006). They also have a 3 year old cat named Abby. Well… now you know who the best people and pets in this vacation were, now I will tell you where this fantasy started………….

     

     We arrived at night coming in from Hilton Head, South Carolina. The dogs ran out to greet us; I was scared at first… until Charlie & Patches licked me! Aunt Claudia told me not to get involved with Sam.

     

    We had a delicious dinner then I fed the dogs. I gave them treats, wrestled with Charlie, and then I went to bed.

     

     The next day I woke up at 5:00am. The dogs were howling. Diana was moaning. And I got out of bed.  I walked to the kitchen, where the dogs were. There was a figure outside… I thought it was my dead Aunt Alma (she died in the bed that my family and I slept in). I laid down on a dog bed the 3 dogs (including Sam) curled up around me.

     

     At 5:30am Uncle Buck woke up. He went outside. I followed. I let the dogs outside I rushed with their speed… to find a beautiful dock in front of a highlighted lake of sunrise. I stood in awe of the beauty.

     There were a few boats parked beside the ancient dock. The dock was old, but had some sort of place in my heart.

    There was a small bench connected to the dock. I just inhaled the sight and exhaled the beauty of the lake.

     

    Far out in the center there were trees… it looked like an Island with no land: mysterious, wet, and totally natural. Later we went inside to eat. I fed the dogs. I gave them all a good pat on the head. Stuffed them with treats. Then we had marvelous pancakes.

     

    After we were dressed we went on a boat ride. I drove half the time. We had personal tour guides! (Ha-ha!) 

     

    It was nearing lunch time when they said that we would be eating at Larry’s (it’s a restaurant). When we docked I said, “Is Larry’s down the street?” We parked behind what I thought was a rundown gas station. They said, “This is Larry’s!” Guess what, it had a gas station! We all went inside….. I nearly cried they had:  fox, deer, bear, and moose heads hung on the wall! I grew an immediate hate for that restaurant. I bit my grilled cheese sandwich with pure hatred. I chewed… then thought… this is the best grilled cheese sandwich ever!  I still hated that restaurant.

     

    When we got back I ran to the dock to watch the sunset.

     

    [Have you figured out my special spot yet? Well… I’ll tell you! It's the dock at sunrise & sunset!]

     

    It was a gorgeous sight. I would have brought the whole scenery with me… but I’m happy it is in my head.

     

    I walked through the wooden white doorway to find Abby sitting by the door. (I am not a fan of cats!)

     

    When I went to bed my Dad told me rumors of the house to freak me out.  I was braver than him, anyway. That night I slept by myself. It doesn’t sound scary, but it was in a way… there were many odd sounds…“Ok so I’m just a chicken.” So at the crack of dawn I ran to the dogs. The floor was creaking, everyone else…. simply… sleeping.

     

    I fed the dogs. I dashed outside faster than a cheetah - just in time for the sunrise. That was the last time I ever saw the sunrise on the lake again.

     

    These  are my memories… memories that I shall cherish forever.

     

    This summer I went to North Carolina where my best adventures began.

     

     

    THE END

     

    Author’s Note: When I began writing about my favorite spot to be I began to see my improvements in writing after a while. 

     

    I am very proud of this writing.

     

    Some of my crafts are Immediate Repeat- which I just recently added into my writing, this is an example: These  are my memories… memories that I shall cherish forever.

     

    I used a lot of different styles.

     

    This is an example of Varied Sentence Length:   North Carolina. Unforgettable. A memorable memory… of my special place. 

     

    This is an example of Power of 3: Far out in the center there were trees… it looked like an Island with no land: mysterious, wet, and totally natural.

     

    This is an example of Kiss the Beginning: This summer I went to my Uncle Buck & Aunt Claudia’s house in North Carolina. There were adventures waiting for me.  –Beginning

     

    This summer I went to my Uncle Buck & Aunt Claudia’s house in North Carolina. There were adventures waiting for me. -End

      

     

     

    I put a lot of heart into this writing.

     

    Thank you for reading this piece of my memory.

     

     

    *****Read and Edited by: Sabrina Y. & Michael S.*****

     

     

     

             

      Notice Nadine's use intentional sentence fragments to start her piece. Also there are three sentences.  Purposeful use of "The Power of 3"!!
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
    "adventures waiting for me" is masterful personification!   
     
     
     
     
     
    (Whispering parenthesis!)
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
    Masterful use of the semicolon to marry two sentences together. 
     
     
     
     
     
     
    More Power of 3!!!
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
    More Power of 3!!!  Doing this with a list is one thing.  Doing it with sentences is even more impressive!
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
    Nadine does an outstanding job in this paragraoh (and throughout the entire piece) of varying her sentence lengths.  Notice the varied length of the sentences!
     
    What is possibly her best line appears in this paragraph:  "I let the dogs outside I rushed with their speed… to find a beautiful dock in front of a highlighted lake of sunrise."
    Try to have your students name this craft! What would they call the craft used in: ."..in front of a highlighted lake of sunrise."
     
     
           
    Nadine strategically uses the super-sized simile.   
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
    This short paragraph just works!  It works because Nadine has chosen a memory that strikes a cord in her heart.  When you have kids pick topics that are close to their hearts - they will write like this more readily!
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
          
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
    Nadine uses the commentary dash (or flashlight dash to highlight the most important part of her sentence - just in time for the sunrise.  
     
     
    Nadine used the craft called "Immediate Repeat"!!