• Our class studied the Sprite/NBA 2006 Slam Dunk Contest video/audio footage.  They watched again and again - and listened.  Each writer recorded the sounds, words and images they noticed into a long list.  Then each writer attempted to make a poem (free verse).  One writer (Michael Trivelis) wrote a rap song!!  Then the writers learned about prepositions (like: in, among, over, between and under!).  Then each writer had to try to take what they had written (the list and the poem) and turn it into a (or craft a new) poem.  Their work and comments appear below. 
     
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    Andre Iguodala's
    best slam dunk in the Sprite/NBA 2006 Dunk Contest
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    And more on the Sixers' site:
     
     
    This amazingly amazing dunk inspired some great writing by our class.
     
    Below is an explanation of what we did and how we wrote it all.
     
     

      List of Prepositions:

    about

    behind

    from

    on

    toward

    above

    below

    in

    on top of

    under

    across

    beneath

    in front of

    onto

    underneath

    after

    beside

    inside

    out of

    until

    against

    between

    instead of

    outside

    up

    along

    by

    into

    over

    upon

    among

    down

    like

    past

    with

    around

    during

    near

    since

    within

    at

    except

    of

    through

    without

    before

    for

    off

    to

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    Below is Gabi's second draft (typed).  Her first draft was a handwritten list.
    All the kids' first drafts were handwritten lists.
     

    # 9 Soarn’

    Crowds galorn’

    Cameras Flashing

    Like fireflies

    It’s his Handn’ time

    On the dunkn’ line

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    Below is Dara's!

     

    !!Dunk!!

     

    Run

    Jump

    F-l-y

    You’re souring though the air

     The crowd goes wild

    Screaming is all you hear

    Smile for the camera

    It’s right at you

    The slam dunk is back

    Ohhhhhhhhhh

    I knew it

    A Perfect 50

     

    Slam Dunk

     

    Into the crowd

    Behind the backboard

    Running to the net

    Then jump

    Like a bird in the sky

    Catch the basketball

    Under the rim

    Into the net

    Then

    SLAM DUNK!!!!

     

     

     

    By Dara Zeltt

    Author’s note

     

    It all started out with just a notebook, a pencil and us.  Mr. Murphy found a video of the Slam Dunk contest.  He told us to write down stuff that we noticed and heard.  After that we wrote poems about them.  First we wrote poems in our notebook then we made it better on the computer. After, Mr. Murphy told us how to do prepositions.  Using our poems we wrote, we made preposition poems.  In the preposition poem I used a craft called a simile.  The sentence was “Like a bird in the sky”. 

                

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    Below is Sami's second draft.

    Dunk!

    Are you ready

    The slam dunk is back

    Jump, jump, jump

    There it is

    That’s skill

    Bank it

    OhhhhhhhhhhhhhH

    Hang time

    He’s soaring

    It woke this crowd up

    Say cheese

    A perfect 50

    It’s a slam dunk

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     Ryan's second draft is below.

    INTENSE

     RUN!

    SPIN!

    DUNK!

    OFF THE BACK BOARD!

    GOAL!  

    THE SLAM DUNK IS BACK!

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    Jordyn's is below!

     

    Run

    Jump

    This is it

     Fly

    Duck

    A Perfect 50

    Hang time

    Swish

    There it is!

    There it is!

    There it is!

    A.I. to A.I. and a perfect dunk!

    Cameras

    Flash

    Flash

    Flashing

    Fans screaming

    10

    10

    10

    10

    10

    An awesome dunk!

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    Taylor Henschel's (with help from Bianca Charnis and Sami Procz) DUNK poem!  Taylor is in Mr. Dan Smith's third grade class!!!

     

     

     Behind the boundary

    Upon the crowd

    Stands Andre Iguodala

    Ready to make his dunk

    Off the backboard

    Ohhhhh!

    Into the net

    Before he lands

    The cameras flash

    He shoots…

    He scores

    A perfect 50.

    Before the gravity

    pulls him away

     The camera gets...

     A perfect shot!!!!

     

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    Lia's is below too:

      

    Slam it

    Dunk it

    OHH!!!

    He shoots

    He scores

    What a Dunk!!!!

    A perfect 50

    He dunked, dunked, and slammed it all the way

    Hang time man

    Ohhhh!!!

    What timing

    Right over the shoulder

    OHHHHHH!!!

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    Jason Millstein's

    Second Draft and then his Preposition Poem appear below:

    SWEET 

    Sweet

    Sick

    This is it

    A.I with the pass

    Ohhhhhhhhh

    There it is show co

    Woke the crowd up

    Right in the locker room

    A PERFECT 50!!!

    DUNK! PREP POEM 

    In the crowd

    Passed the crowd with great speed

    A.I throws the ball off the behind of the backboard

    Iguodala toward the basket

    Grabs the ball

    Underneath the back of the backboard

    Just beneath his head

     Through his hands

       Inside the net

       A perfect fifty

    Jason M 2/24/2006

    Author's note:

     

    At first I listed words that I heard and then stuff I saw. Then Mr. Murphy told me to put in prepositions. They helped me to make it better. After I used prepositions I got the piece above. 

     

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    Michael Pyrih's final poem is below!

    In the crowd

    Out of the crowd

    Above the ground

    A.I. passed it of the back off the backboard

    Iguodala brought the ball under the backboard

    Beneath the net

    In front of the net

    Down in the net

    BAM!

    SLAM DUNK!

    It’s a Perfect 50!!!

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    Steven Hanna's below!!

    Off the back of the backboard

    Out of the crowd

    Above the floor he flies

    Below the fans scream

    Under the backboard

    By the net

    The ball smashes inside the net

    Swoosh

    Down comes Iguodala 

    Into the locker room   

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    Conor Timoney's interesting slant appears below:

    Dunk rap

    I said a right man I haven’t been doin dis, lately that’s it.

    Oh –oh it woke dis crowd up.

    There it is shot gun

    Allen Iverson wit de pass.

    It is a perfect slam dunk.

    Dats hang time,

    The slam dunk is back for sure. Hmmmmmmmm.

      

                      Basketball is de man again…  

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    More appear below:

    A.I. TO A.I.

                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                            

    Andre comes from behind

    Allen throws it behind the backboard

    He takes it

    Ducks underneath the backboard

    Passed the backboard

    The ball goes through the net

    He nailed it

    He’s running down the sideline

    He’s running toward the locker rooms

    Mitchell Soufleris 2-24-06

                 

    Author’s Note

     

    This piece is a follow-up on the same poem. Except in this poem, I added prepositions. We watched a clip of a dunk from this year's NBA dunk contest. The two main contestants were Andre Iguodala and Nate Robinson. We watched two of their main dunks. First, was Andre’s. Allen Iverson helped him by throwing it off the back off the backboard. Andre came from the crowd, took the ball, ducked, and threw it home cleanly through the net. We had to listen for sounds like: Ohhhhhhhh, a perfect 50 and that’s heavy etc. Then we wrote a first draft in our writer’s notebooks. Then we typed it. Then we turned it into a preposition poem. I had a lot of fun because I had never learned prepositions before!

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    The pass…

    AI to AI

    Under

    The backboard

    Ooooooohhhhhhh

    That is heavy

    That’s beautiful

    That’s money

    A perfect 5U

     

     

    Underneath...

    The backboard

    AI to AI

    In front of the backboard

    Around the ball goes

    Into the net

    On top of the rim

    Ohhhhhhhhhhhhh

    A perfect 50       

     Ty Marino